BOBBY BOMBER version 2.0 with notes!

Written by Rob Oakman, Pencils by Jeff Rusland

PAGE ONE

PAGE TWO


PAGE THREE



PAGE FOUR


PAGE FIVE


PAGE SIX


PAGE SEVEN


NOTES BY TY:

This is first rate stuff.  All the right parts are there…my ONLY two notes are about flow and balloon placement.

1)  You’ve left a lot of places where the balloons are intended to go over another character’s chest…or covering up an arm, etc.  This is never a good idea.  Balloons are supposed to find dead space in the room and background.  So find those places where the balloons are on characters and figure out a better place to put that balloon.

2)  There’s one or two places with the movement suddenly switches.  When the bad guy gets tripped, and when Number #2 rolls Edgar away at the end.  In both of those places, the panel should be flipped, especially the last panel for SEVEN.  We want to roll off the page at the end, as a goodbye, not to turn back.

OVERALL:  This is great!


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  1. June 14, 2010 at 1:27 am

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