The Fingerless Prince Layout and Script

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ESTABLISHING, Day, Interior, Elizabeth Watson’s study

Wide Panel with two insert panels to the right.

Large, French style room. Monochrome walls with squared architectural features around large double door and windows. Heavy curtains open; sunlight accents the decorations of the room, plants and a few instruments – no art. On the wall, a framed American flag (worn, grayed, with only 28 stars [evenly spaced with seven across, four down].)  Near the center, ornate velvet chairs, set up in a semi circle. In the corner is a large stuffed chair. A music stand (matching the design of the chairs) holds her computer/PDA device. It is essentially an iPad that is JUST screen – like a thick piece of paper which is, in fact, the whole computer. Currently it has sheet music on it. There are three people seated on the velvet chairs, playing musical instruments. Elizabeth is playing an electric cello. Two men – who look like British orchestral bad boys John Metcalfe (viola) and Nigel Kennedy (violin) – accompany her. She should look blissful and relaxed.

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CLOSE UP, Day, Interior, Elizabeth Watson’s study

Rectangular panel, the first of two inserts in panel one (on the right)

Close up of Elizabeth’s PDA on the music stand. There should be some on-screen elements that indicate that it is a PDA and NOT just a piece of paper (window, symbols, etc.) however, the majority of the screen is taken up with sheet music. Probably Serenade for Violin, Viola & Cello, Op. 8 (Beethoven.) A mess of notes, it looks complicated.

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CLOSE UP Day, Interior, Elizabeth Watson’s study

Rectangular panel, the first of two inserts in panel one (on the right)

Close up of Elizabeth’s PDA on the music stand. In front of the sheet music, in a new window, is the head of Arthur Holmes (making a face.) Music is blasting from the PDA, playing the first few lines of AMERICAN WOMAN.

Music from PDA

“AMERICAN WOMAN, STAY AWAY FROM ME-EEEE

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MEDIUM SHOT, Day, Interior, Elizabeth Watson’s study

About half the page width

Elizabeth, frustrated, has a real time conversation with Arthur Holmes, via her PDA. It is as if they are talking in the same room, except he is on screen. You can see both of their faces.

Elizabeth

ARTHUR! CUT THE NOISE!

Arthur

(Lettered to indicate that it is through the PDA)

OKAY BOSS LADY…

Elizabeth

I GAVE YOU ORDERS NOT TO INTERRUPT ME DURING REHEARSAL

AND TO REMOVE THAT DAMN RINGTONE.

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CLOSE UP, Day, Interior, Elizabeth Watson’s study

About half the page width, longer than the one beside it, overlapping the bottom (7th) panel

On her PDA, Arthurs head is now small and there is displayed a newspaper clipping from an Australian daily newspaper.

Newspaper headline:

WAS ABORIGINAL LEADER MURDERED?

Secondary headline:

DAVID DODSON’S MUTILATED BODY FOUND IN MURRAY RIVER

There is a picture of a young Australian aboriginal (Ngarrindjeri) man, David Dodson. David is in his mid twenties, good looking, serious. He has pale green eyes. The picture is his University graduation photo (with the cloak, hat, the whole deal.)

Under the photo caption:

FRIENDS SAY ACTIVIST WAS TARGET OF WATER COMPANY THREATS

Arthur

(Lettered to indicate that it is through the PDA)

HOLD YOUR HORSES, COWGIRL. NEW CASE. NUMBER TWO SAYS YOU KNOW HIM?

I CAN’T FIND HIM IN YOUR NOTES OR IN YOUR DIARY.

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MEDIUM SHOT

Elizabeth is now holding her PDA in her hands, speaking to Artie. She looks concerned/surprised. You can see the two musicians behind her, shrugging. They have seen her have to rush off on missions before.

Elizabeth

I KNOW HIS SISTER, RUBY. SHE’S A COMPOSER I MET WHILE…WAIT, MY DIARY?

*SIGH* SEE YOU ON THE PLANE.

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ESTABLISHING SHOT Day, Interior, the Deerstalker

Wide Shot

We are inside the Deer Stalker. There are four seats facing a large screen. Above the screen is an ETA Clock, which reads 6.54 hours. There are gadgets and doodads. We see clouds through a window. On the screen is NUMBER TWO. This is the mission briefing. Around him, on screen, are schematics, a map of the Murray River Basin, a picture of the standoff described below and shots of the crime scene. They don’t have to be too detailed, but it should look like a lot if information.

Number Two

HELLO HOLMES’ AND MS. WATSON. THE NGARRINDJERI PEOPLE WISH US TO FIND DODSON’S KILLER. POLICE SUSPECT AN AGENT OF ROSY & FARO IMPORTERS. RF&I WERE DAMMING THE LOCAL WATERWAY.

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ACTION SHOT

Square Panel

On the screen, there is now a close up of the above-mentioned shot of the standoff between the builders and locals. About 50 people. On the right, construction workers, builders, machines (that say R&FI) and a suit or two. Mostly male. On the left, aboriginal protesters, mostly in modern dress, though with a few symbols, flags or pieces of clothing, which identify them as aboriginal. Many of these fellows have bandanas over their faces. A mix of male and female.

Number Two (Continued)

THIS ABORIGINE BLOCKADE PROTESTS THE DAM. THE DEATH OF DODSON, THEIR LEADER INTENSIFIED THE STANDOFF. LOCAL HOLMES INC. AGENTS ARE ON SCENE. ONE TEAM WILL ASSIST THERE, WHILST MS. WATSON’S TEAM EXAMINES THE BODY.

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MEDIUM SHOT, Day, Interior, the Deerstalker

Square Panel

They have moved back from the seats around the screen into a large, open section further back in the plane. As Elizabeth gives out assignments, Trey practices a Kendo pose with her swords, Edgar is seated, looking bored and Arthur examines his amazing techie dream gun, small, but with all the fancy, shiny-shinies. An old school doctor’s leather satchel sits near Elizabeth’s feet (it contains all of her forensics tools.)

Elizabeth

AS I’M ON BODY DUTY, EDGAR, YOU’LL BE IN CHARGE OF THE TEAM…

Edgar

NATURALLY.

Elizabeth

…AT THE DAM SITE. TAKE ARTHUR AND TREY…

Trey

YES!

Elizabeth

…TO HELP MAINTAIN PEACE. NO FIGHTING UNLESS EDGAR SAYS SO.

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MEDIUM SHOT, Day, Interior, the Deerstalker

Closer in on just Arthur and Elizabeth. He is standing over her, looking as concerned as he can, though that is still a little smirky. Elizabeth is seated, staring intently at her PDA.

Caption

7 HOURS LATER

Arthur

YOU TAKING AN AUSSIE AGENT WITH YOU?

Elizabeth

I CAN HANDLE ONE BODY ALONE.

HOWEVER, THIS CASE PRESENTS SOME SINGULARLY FASCINATING CLUES.

Arthur

OKAY MS. INDEPENDENT.

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MEDIUM SHOT, Exterior, Day, Canberra Airport Runway

Wide Panel

We see the Deer Stalker on the runway at Canberra Airport, which looks like a mini-mall with landing strips. Elizabeth is speaking to Aboriginal Officer Pundjel (still holding her satchel.) He is middle aged, portly, with dark skin and thinning hair. He is wearing the beige aboriginal liaison outfit. He is smiling. He looks smug. She should look as though she is both concentrating and doubting him.

Elizabeth

MR. PUNDJEL, YOU EXAMINED THE BODY, CORRECT? THE EVIDENCE SAID MURDER?

Pundjel

I’LL GIVE YOU THE DRUM. HIS FINGERS, TOES AND EYES – ALL CUT OFF! HE WAS ASSAULTED, DRAGGED AND TOSSED IN THE MURRAY. THE RIVER HE WAS FIGHTING FOR. SHONKY BUSINESS, THAT. I’D LOOK AT ROSY & FARO.

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WIDE SHOT, Exterior, Day, Canberra Airport Runway

Final Cascading Panel

Elizabeth looks doubtful. Pundjel looks pleased with himself. In the background, Trey, Edgar and Arthur are ready to go.

Elizabeth

I HAVE MY OWN IDEAS, BUT THEY’RE WORTHLESS UNTIL I SEE THE EVIDENCE.

CAN YOU ESCORT MY TEAM TO THE PROTEST SITE?

Pundjel

(To the team)

TOO RIGHT! COME ON THEN POMMIES.

SURE YOU’LL BE AS USEFUL AS AN ASHTRAY ON A MOTORBIKE.

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1/3 Page Bleeder, Exterior, Day, Murray River Blockade

Bleeder with Insert Panel

At the blockade, near the edge of the Murray River. To the right side of the panel is a melee of fighting, with aboriginals, construction workers, police and Holmes, Inc. agents in the mix. There should be blood, anger and violence. One person near the front should be very distinct and have a cigar in his mouth. (Cigar Man is important further down.) He is beating a downed officer with a cricket bat.

On the left Edgar, Arthur, Pundjel and Trey are pulling up in the Holmes Inc. convertible. Something sexy, in the style of 69 Corvette, only new and modern. Edgar is driving. Trey is practically standing in the back seat, trying to take in the situation.

Cries from the Crowd

(From no one in particular)

MONGREL!

THIS IS OUR LAND!

GET LOST YA DERO SWAGGIE!

WHY DONTCHA MAKE ME?

HOONS!

COME OVER HERE AND SAY THAT!

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INSERT PANEL/CLOSE UP Exterior, Day, Murray River Blockade

Square

Close up on Trey looking badass. The wind in her hair, her cheeks red, she’s ready for a fight and looks amazing.

Trey

CAN I FIGHT NOW?

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LONG, SLENDER WIDE SHOT, Exterior, Day, Murray River Blockade

In this shot Trey jumps out of the car and literally gymnastic floor routines across the area (from far left to far right,) jumping off vehicles, people and equipment, kicking folks as she goes, all the while she’s spewing poetry. This action should be just on the edge of believable as a human being. Everyone has stopped fighting to watch this amazing show. They are stunned into stillness for just a second; she is THAT impressive. You see the Cigar Man still fighting.

Trey

IF WE ASSESS THE SITUATION

AND WE’RE PAST NEGOTIATION

MY VOCATION: MEDIATION

SPECIALIZED NEUTRALIZATION

IN THE FORM OF CONFRONTATION

TO GET YOU BACK INTO FORMATION.

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TALL SLENDER PANEL (1/3 width) Exterior, Day, Murray River Blockade

First of three panels that are visually connected

Trey throws her sword and we see her in this first panel (the sword will carry through to the last of the three.) She looks unfazed, but tough, like she hasn’t just done a massive gymnastics routine.

Trey

CUE STANDING OVATION.

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TALL SLENDER PANEL (1/3 width) Exterior, Day, Murray River Blockade

Second of three panels that are visually connected

Trey’s hand enters this panel on the left and the back end of the sword is seen leaving on the right. In the background, we see shocked folks from both sides. Who IS this girl that has appeared and kicked all their asses?

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TALL SLENDER PANEL (1/3 width) Exterior, Day, Murray River Blockade

Third of three panels that are visually connected

In this panel, we see where the sword was headed. It cleanly cuts in half the cigar of the Cigar Man we’ve seen fighting since panel one. He should look scared for his life, as this sword near misses his nose, just taking out his smoke, the end of which is still smoking.

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WIDE ESTABLISHING SHOT (2/3 width of page) Interior, Day, Community Building

Large, all purpose community room – wood paneled, high ceilinged. For community meetings and celebrations. Posters, flags, etc, cover the walls. Somewhere in the room, on the wall behind the body, is a distinct picture of a pelican. Toward the left, in a chair, curled up with her arms wrapped around her knees, is Ruby Dodson. Ruby is a beautiful and tiny aboriginal woman, in her late twenties. She is dressed in a blue track suit (the shirt is a hoodie of her favourite football team, the Ngarrindjeri Nation. It has pockets. One is slightly bulged) She is the sister of David and resembles him. There is a modern examination table upon which lies the body of David Dodson. He is covered with a woven mat, but it is clearly a body. There is a smaller table beside it. There is a door on the right through which Elizabeth Holmes is entering, still holding her satchel.

Elizabeth

RUBY?

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CLOSE UP SHOT 1/3 width of page) Interior, Day, Community Building

Close up of Ruby’s distraught face. She has clearly been crying. She’s beautiful, but unkempt, as though she has been neglecting herself. She has surprisingly light green eyes and the front of her shoulder length black hair is pulled back in a barrette.

Ruby

HE’S DEAD ELIZABETH. THEY TORTURED AND THEY KILLED MY BABY BROTHER.

HELP ME, PLEASE.

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MEDIUM SHOT, Interior, Day, Community Building

Elizabeth and Ruby are embracing behind the table with David on it. Elizabeth looks sympathetic, but uncomfortable, her gaze on the covered body she is ready to examine. Elizabeth is taller than Ruby, who comes up to about her chin.

Elizabeth

I’D LIKE TO EXAMINE HIM. IT WOULD HELP IF YOU TOLD ME WHAT YOU KNOW.

Ruby

I’LL TRY.

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MEDIUM SHOT, Interior, Day, Community Building

Elizabeth is now standing by the body, which is uncovered. It has no fingertips or toe tips. The eyes are missing. The body is bloated, having been submerged in water. He had been wearing shorts and a t-shirt with the aboriginal flag on it (black and red with a yellow circle) but they are now torn and falling off the corpse.

Some of Elizabeth’s tools have been emptied from her satchel, which is sitting on the small table beside the body. Elizabeth is holding up her PDA and looking through it. It is acting as a magnifying glass, enlarging what she is examining. Elizabeth looks analytical. Ruby, nearby, looks appropriately horrified and devastated, still weeping.

Ruby

HE WENT TO WALK, TO THINK HOW TO FIX THIS WATER BUSINESS.

HE NEVER CAME BACK. HE WASHED UP TWO DAYS LATER,

BEFORE THE POLICE EVEN BOTHERED TO LOOK.

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CLOSE UP

Small square panel, the first of three that match and overlap the bottom panel

Through Elizabeth’s PDA, which has now gone mostly transparent, we see the state of David’s hand. Much of the skin from the top third of most digits is gone or pulled back, torn. On the screen of the PDA, a highlighted line is traced along the edge of the tear and numbers and measurements are listed all around it.

Somewhere on the screen if should say TRANSFERRING DATA…

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CLOSE UP

Small square panel, the second of three that match and overlap the bottom panel

The same as above, now with his toes/the soles of his feet.

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CLOSE UP

Small square panel, the third of three that match and overlap the bottom panel

The same as above, now with his empty eye sockets.

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MEDIUM SHOT Interior, Day, Community Building

Elizabeth is behind the upset Ruby, her right hand on her shoulder. Elizabeth has a trace of a smile. Her left hand is holding her PDA, on which we see Arthur’s head (again over top of whatever she was working on.) Elizabeth is not looking at the PDA, but at Ruby. Behind them, we see the pelican picture (it does not have to be obvious. It is symbolic. An aboriginal totem for death.)

Elizabeth

RUBY, THE EVIDENCE IS CLEAR.

YOUR BROTHER WASN’T MURDERED. HIS DEATH WAS ACCIDENTAL.

Arthur (through PDA)

ACCIDENTAL?

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MEDIUM SHOT Interior, Day, Community Building

Rectangular panel

Over Elizabeth’s shoulder, we see her PDA. Arthur’s head now takes up most of the screen. Behind him, we see that the fighting still proceeds.

Elizabeth

ARTHUR??

Arthur (through PDA)

AT YOUR SERVICE. THIS “RIOT” IS AS DULL AS CHRISTMAS AT THE COHENS.

SO, TELL ME ABOUT THIS ACCIDENTAL…

Elizabeth

ARTHUR MIN HOLMES, NO MORE INTERRUPTIONS!

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MEDIUM SHOT Interior, Day, Community Building

Elizabeth pushes a button to turn off her PDA. Beside her Ruby looks devastated. Her hand has moved up towards her mouth, as though in shock.

Elizabeth

SORRY. I’VE TURNED IT OFF. ARE YOU OKAY?

Ruby

YOU’RE WRONG! SOME HARDCASE WORKING FOR

ROSY & FARO DID THIS. LOOK AT HIM!

Elizabeth

I HAVE. MY SCIENCE IS SOUND.

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MEDIUM SHOT, Exterior, Cliffs of the Murray River, Early Evening

Angled panel, first of four

David Dodson, aboriginal man in his early twenties, wearing shorts, an aboriginal flag t-shirt and sandals. He has pale green eyes. He is in the process of slipping off the edge of the red/orange Murray Cliffs. The edge has eroded and crumbled, so there should be loose rocks and dust. He should be flailing and look afraid, trying to catch his footing. His back should be dragging as he falls.

Elizabeth in Caption

THESE “DRAG MARKS” CONTAIN DISTINCTIVE RED, SILICATE-RICH, ARKOSE SANDSTONE.

I’VE MATCHED THE SALINITY AND IRON OXIDE CONTENT WITH STONE FROM AN EXACT LOCATION. DAVID FELL FROM THE HIGHLY ERODIBLE MURRAY RIVER CLIFFS.

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CLOSE UP, Exterior, Cliffs of the Murray River, Early Evening

Angled panel, second of four

Close up of David’s head smashing into a rock jutting out of the cliff side, as he falls.

Elizabeth in Caption

TRACES OF THE SAME STONE ARE IN THE HEAD WOUND.

THE DIRECTIONALITY OF IMPACT INDICATES A FALL, WHICH KILLED HIM.

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MEDIUM SHOT, Exterior, the Murray River, Early Evening

Angled panel, third of five

David is now in the Murray River, floating, face first. The back of his shirt and shorts are torn from the fall and he is bleeding heavily from a massive dent in the back of his head. He is dead.

Elizabeth in Caption

OFFICER PUNDJEL’S IMAGINED ASSAULT NEVER OCCURED.

THE BODY’S ORIFICES CAN RELAX IN WATER AND CREATE THE

APPEARANCE OF VIOLATION. REFERENCE THE APOSHIAN CASE OF 1933.

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CLOSE UP, Exterior, the shore of the Murray River, Morning

Angled panel, fifth of five

Close up on David’s hand, mostly submerged, but with fingertips of his curled hand above water, where three crayfish are beginning to pinch and bite.

Elizabeth in Caption

AS FOR THE FINGERS, TOES AND EYES, IT WAS CRAWDADDIES. CRAYFISH.

EUASTACUS ARMATUS, SPECIFICALLY. THEY ARE OPPORTUNISTIC OMNIVORES

AND THEIR DISTINCTIVE PINCER MARKS, NOT UNLIKE KNIFE WOUNDS.

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CLOSE UP Interior, Day, Community Building

Tall, thin panel.

Close up on Ruby Dodson’s face. She is ugly with rage, her expression twisted, her teeth showing.

Ruby

DID ROSY & FARO BUY YOU OFF?

COULD’NT TAKE OUR LAND, SO THEY SUCKED IT DRY.

COULDN’T KILL DAVID’S SPIRIT, SO THEY HIRED YOU?

I AM LOYAL TO MY PEOPLE.

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MEDIUM SHOT Interior, Day, Community Building

Rectangular panel with insert.

Elizabeth is shocked and frightened, she has raised her hands, as though denying. Ruby, still ugly angry is reaching into her pocket (the one with the bulge.)

Elizabeth

AND I AM LOYAL TO THE LEGACY OF MY GREAT GRANDFATHER.

YOUR PEOPLE HIRED US TO FIND THE TRUTH.

R&FI DID NOT DO THIS.

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CLOSE UP

Small insert panel

Ruby’s hand pulling a handgun out of her pocket

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WIDE SHOT, Interior, Day, Community Building

Bleeder Panel across the middle of the page.

Ruby is pointing a small handgun at Elizabeth’s face. Elizabeth is stunned. Behind Ruby, stand Arthur and Pundjel. Arthur’s fancy, shiny gun has a laser pointer trained on Ruby. Pundjel looks sad.

Ruby

HE’S A MARTYR. A HERO. HE CAN’T BE JUST DEAD.

Arthur

HEY, CRAZY-WITH-GRIEF LADY, HOW’S ABOUT POINTING YOUR GUN

AT SOMETHING OTHER THAN MY COUSIN’S HEAD?

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WIDE SHOT, Interior, Day, Community Building

Ruby, surprised, turns to look at the men as Elizabeth grabs the gun. Pundjel is moving forward toward Ruby and Arthur is holding his place, with his weapon still pointed at Ruby.

Pundjel

LITTLE CUZ, WHAT’S THIS BUSINESS?

HAVE YOU FORGOTTEN YOUR BROTHER SO SOON?

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MEDIUM SHOT Interior, Day, Community Building

Pundjel now has his hands on Ruby’s shoulders and is looking down at her with concern. She no longer looks angry, but rather sad and devastated.

Pundjel

HE LIVED PEACEABLY. HE BELIEVED IN THE DREAMING.

IF WE’RE GOING TO SAVE THE RIVER, WE NEED TO DO IT HONOURABLY,

AS OUR DAVID WOULD HAVE.

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MEDIUM SHOT, Interior, Day, Community Building

Elizabeth is gaining her composure. Artie is re-holstering his gun. In the background, Pundjel is petting the head of Ruby who is seated, handcuffed, crying into her hands.

Elizabeth

THANK YOU, THOUGH YOU DID ABANDON YOUR POST.

PROTEST STATUS?

Arthur

EVERYONE’S STILL RACKING UP HIT POINTS.

HOPE WAS THAT RUBY’D BE A VOICE OF REASON, BUT CLEARLY THAT’S…

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MEDIUM SHOT, Interior, Day, Community Building

Artie’s expression says “eureka!” He has figured out the solution. He is looking over towards Pundjel.

Arthur

WAIT! OFFICER KRUPKE!

Pundjel

PUNDJEL

Arthur

WHATEVER. WANNA BE A HERO?

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ESTABLISHING SHOT, Exterior, Day, over protest area

Wide panel across whole page

There is a large helicopter with ARTEK (Artie’s company) across the side, flying over the protest site. From the bottom hangs a massive screen on which we see the face of Pundjel. His words are blasting from massive speakers over the fight, causing people to stop and look.

Pundjel (through loudspeakers)

SONS AND DAUGHTERS, IT IS TIME TO LAY DOWN OUR WEAPONS

AND HONOUR THE LIFE OF DAVID DODSON.

HIS DEATH, PROVEN TO BE AN ACCIDENT, DOES NOT MEAN THE END OF HIS STRUGGLE,

BUT HIS SPIRIT WOULD WANT TO SEE THE END OF THIS FIGHT!

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MEDIUM SHOT, Interior, Day, Artek Helicopter front seat

Tall panel, about 1/3 width  & 1/3 height of page

Arthur and Elizabeth are in the Artek helicopter. Artie, on the right, is piloting the helicopter. They are both wearing head gear that allows them to converse.

Elizabeth

YOU OWN THIS?

Arthur

IT’S FOR L.A.N. PARTIES WITH MY AUSSIE I.T. GUYS

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MEDIUM SHOT, Exterior, Day

Tall panel, about 1/3 width  & 1/3 height of page

Through the window we see Elizabeth looking out the window down at the ground. Artie is behind her, still piloting.

Elizabeth

IT’S WORKING. THE FIGHTING HAS STOPPED

Arthur

SPEAKING OF FIGHTING, AM I FORGIVEN FOR iStalking YOU?

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MEDIUM SHOT, Interior, Day, Artek Helicopter front seat

Tall panel, about 1/3 width  & 1/3 height of page

Elizabeth gives Arthur a genuine smile. He is a part of the team and a part of her family.

Elizabeth

AND FOR SAVING ME FROM RUBY’S ANGER? YES.

ONE CAN MORE EASILY EXCUSE THE THINGS ONE DOES FOR FAMILY

Arthur

EVEN DISTANT CANADIAN COUSINS, FOUR TIMES REMOVED?

Elizabeth

YES ARTIE, EVEN YOU.

  1. Ty Templeton
    June 16, 2010 at 10:09 am

    These pages are excellent, as expected. I love the first page, and am intrigued by the third page, which is very wild looking. I’m happy with everything up until the last two pages where it becomes a little more staid and repetitive. I know the script puts some talking heads in here, but you can still pull out and back with more boldness. There’s a sense of a swinging camera at belt buckle level for two pages. I wouldn’t mind a minor zooming in and zooming out just a bit on these last two pages. The first five pages are just home runs, though.

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