THE RETURN OF IGOPOGO -script by Dino Caruso (with notes)

Script for Holmes Inc. Volume two
THE RETURN OF IGOPOGO or THE OLD MAN AND THE SEA MONSTER
Written by Dino Caruso…first draft March 23, 2011

Page 1 –

1- Old Edgar and Artie are the focus of this panel. We have a tight shot on the two of
them. This panel will be an inset in the much larger second panel.

Artie: Are you sure you wouldn’t rather be back at the command centre where it’s safer?

Old Edgar: Nonsense, boy! This brings back memories of my days in the Royal Navy.
Now then…shall we continue with the briefing?

2- The camera pulls back and we see that the two of them are seated on the deck of the
Holmes Inc. Marine Exploration and Research Vessel. This shot is from behind them,
over their shoulders. We can’t see the whole ship, but we know that they’re on one now.

They’re talking while Artie has four different windows open on his laptop…with one,
he’s reviewing the history of Lake Simcoe scans. With another, he’s playing long
distance chess against a supercomputer. With another, he’s trying to find the best place to
eat in Toronto. With the last, he’s planning an elaborate hologram prank that looks like a
sea monster.

Old Edgar has a regular paper file folder of his old Igopogo mission in his hands. He’s
looking over to check out Artie’s computer. Old Edgar is seated in his wheelchair.
There’s a picture of General Madlock (more about him soon) paperclipped to the folder.

CAPTION: Lake Simcoe, Ontario, Canada.

Artie: Sure, just let me close down some of these windows.

Old Edgar: Windows, eh? Let’s see what you’ve got brewing.

Arite: Well, I’ve been reviewing the new reports of the monster sightings, playing chess
against Wilson, looking for a good restaurant in Toronto and…errr…working on some
hologram schematics.

Credits…
Tentative title: THE OLD MAN AND THE SEA MONSTER
Or Tentative title 2: THE RETURN OF IGOPOGO
Written by: Dino Caruso
Illustrated by: Pierce Desrochers-O’Sullivan
Lettered by: ?

3- A wide shop shows the entirety of the ship. We can still see Artie and Edgar on the
deck as they continue to talk.

Old Edgar: Holograms! Hah! Monkeyshines, no doubt…

Artie: Errr…weren’t we gonna talk about Igopogo?

4- Close shot on Old Edgar as he looks back at his file folder again.

Old Edgar: Igopogo. Indeed.

Old Edgar: Well…it was 1976…

Page 2 – Some flashbacks to the events of the 70s. Perhaps we change the panel boarders
or alter the greytones to explicitly show that this is a flashback. Edgar will narrate the
flashbacks.

1- Old Edgar (1970s version) and his research team have found the monster. The boat
they’re on in the flashback is smaller and less sophisticated than the present model. There
is music coming from a set of external speakers (maybe we show a few musical notes and
some lyrics like: “still crazy after all these years…”). It would no doubt be a hi-fi system
with genuine LP record albums.

The monster is docile. It’s close to the boat.

This page will be narrated by Old Edgar in Caption boxes.

NARRATION: There had been a rash of “sea monster” sightings in Lake Simcoe and we
quickly discovered that the beast, called Igopogo, was real…and apparently very docile
and intelligent.

2- The government troops (air force, navy, etc.), led by the bastard General (who we
haven’t seen yet) come in…helicopters, boats. This will be a wide shot, showing the
incoming troops.

NARRATION: However as is so often the case, the military…led by that fiend
General Madlock… had its own agenda regarding scientific discoveries.

3- The monster gets agitated. It rears up. It snarls or roars.

NARRATION: They were upon us very quickly. We had no time to lure Igopogo to
safety.

4- We see a close up of the general on one of the Canadian Navy ships.

General: FIRE!

NARRATION: That damnable Madlock was scheming to clone the beast in an attempt
to weaponize it. He was soon drummed out of the service after the holy hell I raised on
Downing Street.

5- Igopogo is gunned down, while Edgar cries out.

Old Edgar (1970s version): Noooo!

NARRATION: Madlock and I crossed swords several times after that…Latest intel
placed him in Buffalo working with some privateer miscreants. That was about a year
ago.

Page 3 – back in the present again.

1- We’re back in the present again. Old Edgar is emotional after his reminiscing.

Old Edgar: You know, I never was able to get a straight answer out of anyone regarding
the disposition of Igopogo’s remains.

Voice from off panel: Sir!

2- A crewman has popped out of the bridge. Old Edgar and Artie turn to look at him.

Crewman: Scans have gone active! We’re picking up something to port…closing fast!

3- They all rush over to the railing, where something is brewing under the water. We still
can’t see it, but it’s definitely a first indication. A large compass on the wall behind them
starts spinning wildly. Old Edgar glances at it.

4- Close on Artie and Edgar. There are crewmen in the background. The crewmen all
look shocked. Artie’s not shocked, but he doesn’t know how to explain this. Old Edgar
has the look of someone who’s put all the pieces together. He just needed to see this one
final bit of evidence.

Artie: You said the monster from ’76 was the last of its kind. So…what then? Alien?
Robot?

Old Edgar: Is that the best you’ve got, boy? You’ve already been presented with enough
information to solve this.

Old Edgar: Maybe we should have left you back at the command centre, hmm? Heh.

5- Igopogo 2.0 comes out of the water, looking much more ferocious than the 70s version

did, but still the same basic anatomy and design.

Artie (from the deck of the boat, small font, whisper/mumble): Alien robot, maybe??

Page 4 –

1- Igo turns and heads off.

Crewman from the bridge: It’s heading toward Orillia. ETA 15 minutes.

Old Edgar: We’ve got to slow him down. Ideas?

Artie: Not sure if it’ll work, but chase him! I’ll set it up.

2- Artie works on attaching a gizmo to the railing. It’s a small hologram projector.

Artie (thought bubble): I made this hologram to spook Edgar and the crew…I didn’t
actually believe the new monster sightings here were real.

3- Artie pushes a button on the device.

Artie (thought bubble): Never thought I’d be using it to slow down the real thing!

4- Now there’s a hologramatic Igopogo in the path of the real one. The real one rears up
stop. This can be a bigger panel.

Page 5 –

1- Artie rejoins Old Edgar near the railing. Old Edgar’s got a piece of paper…a readout
from scans taken of the water.

Artie: Igopogo will realize the hologram’s not real in a minute or so. Are you going to tell
me what’s going on now?

Old Edgar: Did you notice that compass spinning wildly? And here…these readings…
Water temperature near the beast is warmer than average and there is an atypical amount
of fluorescent activity in its wake.

Old Edgar: Does that make it simpler?

2- Two shot again.

Artie: Uhhh…

Old Edgar: Buffalo???

3- The beast and the hologram continue their “dance”, but the real Igopogo is getting
bolder now.

4- Artie hustles down a set of stairs in the boat. There’s a door marked SCIENCE LAB
visible at the bottom of the stairs.

CAPTION (OLD EDGAR TALKING): Electromagnetic Remote Control…pioneered at
the University of Buffalo! That’s how the beast is being controlled.

5- Artie grabs the magnetic field inhibitor from the scanning electron microscope.

CAPTION (OLD EDGAR TALKING): Magnetic nanoparticles have been implanted in
its brain! We’ve got to disrupt that magnetic field.

Page 6 –

1- Artie runs across the deck holding the device as the crew and Old Edgar look on.

Old Edgar: Of course! Well played, boy!

Crewman: What on earth is he doing?

Old Edgar: He’s got the Magnetic nullifier from the Scanning Electron Microscope. It
should work.

2- The real Igopogo bursts through the hologramatic one. The ship is still close enough
to the beast for what Artie’s got planned. It might look cool if the hologram burst
into “shards of light” as Igopogo goes through it.

3- Artie leaps off the boat, holding the device. He gets some parting advice from Old
Edgar.

Old Edgar: The base of the skull…near the occipital lobe!

4- Artie scrambles up Igopogo’s back.

5- He clamps the device on Igo’s skull.

Page 7

1- The beast is calmer. Artie calls over to Old Edgar on the ship.

Artie: What now?

Old Edgar: Obvious isn’t it? We trace the magnetic waves back to their point of origin
and roust Madlock and his cronies who were no doubt using this as demonstration of the
beast’s potential as a weapon.

Artie: Madlock? You think he’s still at it?

2- Focus on Old Edgar.

Old Edgar: No doubt. It’s got his fingerprints all over it. He must’ve finally succeeded
in cloning Igopogo and found a way to use Nanomagnetic remote control to influence its
behaviour. The theory fits the facts.

Old Edgar: Out of the water m’lad. There’s still work to be done.

3- Madlock (older, but evidently no wiser) and his goons are being led out of their
hideout by the cops. Old Edgar and Artie are standing and watching. Madlock glowers at
Holmes.

CAPTION: LATER.

4- Two shot…Artie and Old Edgar.

Artie: Looks like you’ve still got a lot to offer in the field, huh?

Old Edgar: More than you realize.

Artie: What do you mean?

5- Artie rolls his eyes as Edgar lays it on him.

Old Edgar: Your chess problem? Knight to Rook 5.
Old Edgar: The best restaurant in Toronto? Definitely Far Niente.
Old Edgar: And that hologram? Not your best work. Let’s discuss the illumination matrix
on the plane, shall we?

End.

Some lovely stuff in there.  I still love the running up the beast’s neck, and the playing chess and looking for a good restaurant, and the callback at the end.  Good choices.

I’m not as thrilled with the idea that the General and his henchmen are routed with nothing to show for it.  They are simply deduced as the culprits and captured in almost the same sentence.  Could I have some moment of exchange at the arrest?  Some moment of calling the cops?  It’s too big a story jump to go from “they’re over there” to “they’re all captured”.  Give me one more panel to transition that moment, or a line or two to cover what we missed.  Otherwise the General is furniture, not a character.

  1. March 29, 2011 at 2:57 am

    Great points, and thanks for the feedback! I’m heading to the keyboard even as we speak…

  2. March 29, 2011 at 3:52 am

    There’s some great moments in here, Dino. I’ll echo Ty (or Rob’s?) comment about the great callback at the end. Wonderful way to wrap up the story.

    I did notice a piece of dialogue that stood out as a bit wooden to me:
    “Old Edgar: Nonsense, boy! This brings back memories of my days in the Royal Navy. Now then…shall we continue with the briefing?”

    This felt a little too much like “here’s some exposition, now let’s get back to what we were talking about”. Oddly enough, if you take away the “Now then, shall we continue with the briefing?” then it just reads as reminiscing. Reads cleaner, I think.

    Not sure what your take on it is, but that’s my two cents.

    As I said, great work, man! Can’t wait to see what Igopogo ends up looking like.

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